i just met with my English professor about ideas for my second Literature paper. I mentioned before that she had critical analysis about my style, and it was to say the least, a news flash because although she’s insanely right i myself had never thought twice about her correction – im too flowery, expressive, wordy. Shes right! i know where it came from too –> pure attempts in Bull Shitting my way through Lit courses in Highschool, where the longer the better, and the more discriptive…the higher grade. Subconsciously, i formed my habits, totally unaware that i was so terrified of my writing sounding like a 6th grader, i wasnt even making sense.
ANYWAY, it now peices together. The second week of this semesters classes, my Lit professor made us play a little word game.
She listed 15 words, and had us give the definition for each. Our Own Definition. What we thought the words meant. take a look.
you – the person of whom you are speaking directly to
over – something finished
minute – 60 seconds
to – begining of an infinitive
my – belonging to one’s self
don’t – contraction of do not. Order a negative action
girl - female. opposit of a boy.
come – move towards something/someone
why – question asking a purpose
on – how something is placed
meet – come together
want – a desire
for – explaining a purpose
I – own self
a – stating something singlular
She then wrote on the board:
Why dont you come on over for a minute, i want you to meet my girl.
She said, ”replace this sentence with the defininitions you just wrote”
Outcome:
As a question asking a purpose, order a negative action to the person directly spoken to by moving towards something that is placed to something finished explaining a purpose stating something singlular for 60 seconds, my own self desires the person directly spoken to, the begining of an infinitive and come together the female belonging to ones self.
Talk about being wordy. Point taken.
